venkatmba - 2008-8-17 22:04:00
以下样卷均为考生的实际作文卷,典型的反映了五个不同分数段的应有水平.大家可以参考一下,以便检查自己的写作水平. cC?5k}Ðöbforum.liuxuehome.comyÁSç0+8
reading selectively or extensively? cC?5k}Ðöbforum.liuxuehome.comyÁSç0+8
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样张1(得分:2分) cC?5k}Ðöbforum.liuxuehome.comyÁSç0+8
most people thought that read book should have been selectived.but others believed reading extensively was correction. cC?5k}Ðöbforum.liuxuehome.comyÁSç0+8
selective books or reading extensibely? cC?5k}Ðöbforum.liuxuehome.comyÁSç0+8
sure,you can choice one too book to read for us.we should choose which we interested,and it would be helpful for us. cC?5k}Ðöbforum.liuxuehome.comyÁSç0+8
on another hand.someone’s interesting was wide.each book could bring you specific contain we couldn’t reading at only one level. cC?5k}Ðöbforum.liuxuehome.comyÁSç0+8
i confirmed all of these ideas were good but weren’t wise. cC?5k}Ðöbforum.liuxuehome.comyÁSç0+8
as a reader,the main task is to discover more and more,books,the second task is to held some which wonderful and helpful for us.don’t treat these books with rackless abandon. cC?5k}Ðöbforum.liuxuehome.comyÁSç0+8
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【点评】文章条理不清,不成篇章.语言支离破碎,大部分句子不但有语言和词汇错误,而且多数为严重错误. cC?5k}Ðöbforum.liuxuehome.comyÁSç0+8
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i think reading not only selectively but also extensively.because the two sides are not contradict.our time is limited.so we can not read every book in the-world.however,we will not be interested in every book.we should read those books may be useful to ours,read those books which we like.but those books which we choose must be extensively.so it can give ours all kinds of knowledge,noes and so on.it also make ours became a wise man.on the one hand reading selectively let ours not waste our time which it is limited.moreover it can emphasis among all books that we can read.on the other hand,reading extensively can deal with all kinds of need in our life.they are all useful to ours. cC?5k}Ðöbforum.liuxuehome.comyÁSç0+8
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【点评】基本切题,但连贯性差,意思表达不清，所有内容都挤在一起.语言错误较多,而且多数为严重语言错误. cC?5k}Ðöbforum.liuxuehome.comyÁSç0+8
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some people think reading shall be choosed.because some books are good to humen beings.and some books are harmful to people. cC?5k}Ðöbforum.liuxuehome.comyÁSç0+8
some people think that men shoued read books widely.because wide reading can help man get much knowledge,and man can use it to change the world. cC?5k}Ðöbforum.liuxuehome.comyÁSç0+8
it is my point that reading must be selectively.because reading is important.cC?5k}Ðöbforum.liuxuehome.comyÁSç0+8
venkatmba - 2008-8-17 22:15:00
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