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venkatmba - 2008-8-18 0:13:00

生命是运动的，生命是一个过程。每一天都可以是一个全新的开始，只要你懂得了生命的道理。从现在开始，认真对待生命中的每一天吧，美好的未来就在我们手里！

　　Just at the Beginning

　　“We are reading the first verse of the first chapter of a book whose pages are infinite.”

　　I do not know who wrote those words, but I have always liked them as a reminder that the future can be anything we want to make it. We can take the mysterious, hazy future and carve out of it anything that we can imagine, just like a sculptor carves a statue from a shapeless stone.

　　We are all in the position of the farmer. If we plant a good seed, we reap a good harvest. If our seed is poor and full of weeds, we reap a useless crop. If we plant nothing at all, we harvest nothing at all.

　　I want the future to be better than the past. I don’t want it contaminated by the mistakes and errors with which history is filled. We should all be concerned about the future because that is where we will spend the reminder of our lives.① The past is gone and static. Nothing we can do will change it.② The future is before us and dynamic. Everything we do will affect it.

　　Each day will brings with it new frontiers, in our homes and in our businesses, if we will only recognize them. We are just at the beginning of the progress in every field of human endeavor.

　　［230 words］

　　行文点评

　　本文虽然短小，但人生道理却深寓其中。首段首句的引文直指主题，随后在下一段中进行了阐释，提出自己的观点：未来操之在我，我们则在起跑点，我们能掌控自己的未来。第三段将我们的生活比作农夫的劳动，对论点进行论述。接下来一段中，作者提出自己对未来的希望，最后一段进行总结，警示人们未来要靠自己掌握，重申主题。

　　文中多处使用比喻、对比，例如将我们比作雕塑家、农夫，将昨天与明天相比，使得论证更加生动形象。

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　　在起跑线上

　　“我们正在阅读一本不知道多少页数的书的第一章的第一节…”

　　我不知道这段文字是谁写的，但我一直很喜欢用它来提醒自己：未来操之在我。我们可以掌握神秘而不可知的未来，从中创出我们所能想象的任何东西，一如雕刻家可以将一块没有形状的石头刻成雕像一样。

　　我们每个人都像是一个农夫。如果我们种下好种子，就会有丰收。如果种子不好而且田里杂草丛生，虽会有点儿收成但却派不上多大用场。而如果我们什么都不种，就根本不会有任何收获。

　　不管怎样，我希望未来会比过去更好。我不希望在未来再犯下那些充斥在历史中的错误。关心未来吧，因为我们的余生都要在未来中度过。往昔已经一去不复返了，而且是静止的，任凭我们怎么努力都不能改变它了。而未来就在我们眼前，而且是动态的，我们的任何行为都会影响到它。

　　如果我们能够认识得到，我们会发现每天都会有一些新的情况发生，在家里，还有我们的事业里。人类在每个领域都努力向前，而我们就处在起跑线上。

　　词汇斟酌

　　infinite a. 无穷的，无限的

　　mysterious a. 神秘的，难以理解的

　　hazy a. 朦胧的，烟雾弥漫的，模糊的

　　sculptor n. 雕刻家

　　contaminate vt. 弄脏，污染

　　static a. 静止的，停止的

　　dynamic a. 有活力的，动态的

　　endeavor vt.& n. 尽力，努力，尝试

　　佳句临摹

　　①【注释】be concerned about关心……

　　【临摹】People are more and more concerned about the traffic of big city.人们越来越关注大城市的交通。

　　②【注释】we can do是插入语，有助于变化句式

　　【临摹】What explanation do you suppose the teacher could give? 你想老师会如何解释？(do you suppose插入成分)

　　思如泉涌

　　Ideal is the beacon. Without ideal, there is no secure direction; without direction, there is no life. 理想是指路明灯。没有理想，就没有坚定的方向。没有了方向，生活也就失去了意义。

　　Life is long if you know how to use it.如能善于利用，生命乃长。

venkatmba - 2008-8-18 0:13:00

英语六级写作范文及点评：为快乐而读书

不同的人有不同的读书目的。作者通过这篇文章给读者传递了这样一个信息：读书不应该仅仅是为了通过考试、获取信息，而是应该让自己感到心情愉悦，活得更充实。

　　Reading for Pleasure

　　The first thing I want to insist on is that reading should be enjoyable. Of course, there are many books that we all have to read, either to pass examinations or to acquire information, from which it is impossible to extract enjoyment. We are reading them for instruction, and the best we can hope is that our need for it will enable us to get through them without tedium. Such books we read with resignation rather than with alacrity. But that is not the sort of reading I have in mind. The books I shall mention in due course will help you neither to get a degree nor to earn your living, they will not teach you to sail a boat or get a stalled motor to run, but they will help you to live more fully. That, however, they cannot do unless you enjoy reading them.

　　Every man is his own best critic. Whatever the learned say about a book, however unanimous they are in their praise of it, unless it interests you, it is no business of yours①. And you who read are the final judge of the value to you of the book you are reading. We are none of us exactly like everyone else, only rather like, and it would be unreasonable to suppose that the books that have meant a great deal to me should be precisely those that will mean a great deal to you. But there are books that I feel the richer for having read, and I think I should not be quite the man I am if I had not read them. No one is under an obligation to read poetry or fiction or the miscellaneous literature which is classed as belles-lettres②. He must read them for pleasure，and who can claim that what pleases one man must necessarily please another?

　　［315 words］

　　行文点评

　　文章开篇点题，用The first thing 首先表明了reading should be enjoyable这一观点。接下来作者从读书的目的说明只有enjoy reading才能够有助你live more fully。第一段最后一句That, however, they cannot do unless you enjoy reading them.对全段做出归纳总结，与段首主题句相互呼应，使本段结构严谨。

　　第二段首句Every man is his own best critic.就是本段的主题句，全段围绕这个主题展开议论。结尾处使用了一个反问句，这样不仅深化了主题，而且能引起读者的共鸣。

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　　为快乐而读书

　　我想强调的第一点是，阅读应当是令人愉悦的。当然，我们每一个人都会为了通过考试，或是为了获取信息而阅读大量的书籍，这样的阅读是无法让我们获得快乐的。我们读这些书是为了获得指导，我们能期望的最多就是我们在读完之后不至于感到单调乏味。这样的书，我们读得无可奈何而不是轻松愉快。不过，这类阅读并不是我想要谈的。我在下面将要提到的那一类书既不能帮助你获取学位，也不能帮助你挣钱谋生，更不能教会你驾驶船只或修好出了故障的马达，然而，它们能够帮助你活得更加充实。而这一点，除非你喜欢读它们，否则是无法做到的。

　　最好的评论家是每个人自己。无论某个学者对某一本书作了什么评价，无论他们如何众口一词地对它大加称赞，倘若它激不起你的兴趣，那么这本书就与你毫不相干。作为读者，你是你所读书籍价值的仲裁人。我们当中，没有一个人跟另外一个人的评价完全相像，至多有点相像而已。想当然地认为对我来说很有价值的书恰恰对你也很有价值，这是不合情理的。但是也确实有这样的书，在读完之后，我感到更加充实了，我觉得要是没有读过它们，我就不会成为现在的我。没有什么人非要去读诗歌、小说以及其他归为“纯文学”的作品不可。读者读这些作品必然是为了获取快乐；然而谁又能说，使一位读者感到愉悦的书一定会让另一位读者喜欢呢?
　　词汇斟酌

　　extract vt. 获得，索取

　　tedium n. 厌烦, 沉闷

　　resignation n. 听任, 顺从

　　alacrity n. 爽快，乐意

　　in due course 及时地，在适当时

venkatmba - 2008-8-18 0:14:00

ear one’s living 赚钱谋生

　　stall v.(使)( 发动机)熄火

　　unanimous a. 全体一致的，一致同意的

　　miscellaneous a. 各色各样混在一起, 混杂的

　　belles-lettres n. 纯文学

　　佳句临摹

　　①【注释】no business of one’s与某人无关

　　【临摹】My plan is no business of yours.我的计划与你无关。

　　②【注释】under an obligation 有义务，有道义负责

　　【临摹】She’s under an obligation to him because he lent her money.因为他把钱借给她了，所以她有偿还他的义务。

　　思如泉涌

　　Books are the ever-burning lamps of accumulated wisdom. 书籍是积聚智慧的长明灯。

　　By reading we enrich the mind, by conversation we polish it. 读书使人充实，沟通使人精明。

venkatmba - 2008-8-18 0:15:00

学生上大学的目的各不相同：探索知识，充实自己；改变自身处境，谋求好的社会地位；满足父母的期望…还有人从未认真想过。

　　The Purpose of School

　　Have you ever asked yourself why children go to school? You will probably say that they go to learn their own language and other languages, arithmetic, geography, geometry, history, science and all the other subjects. That is quite true, but why do they learn these things? And are these things all that they learn at school?

　　We send our children to school to prepare them for the time when they will be big and will have to work for themselves. They learn their own language so that they will be able to tell others clearly what they want and what they know, and understand what others tell them. They learn foreign languages in order to be able to benefit from what people in other countries have written and said and in order to make people from other countries understand what they themselves mean. They learn arithmetic in order to be able to measure and count things in their daily life, geography in order to know something about the world around them, and history to know something about human beings they meet every day. Nearly everything they study at school has some practical use in their life, but is that the only reason why they go to school?

　　No. There is more in education than just learning facts. We go to school, above all①, to learn how to learn, so that, when we have left school, we can continue to learn. A man who really knows how to learn will always be successful, because whenever he has to do something new which he has never had to do before, he will rapidly teach himself how to do it in the best way. The uneducated person, on the other hand②, is either unable to do something new, or does it badly.The purpose of schools, therefore, is not just to teach languages, arithmetic, geography, etc., but teach pupils the way to learn.

　　［330 words］

　　行文点评

　　全文结构清晰、脉络分明。开篇点题，提出问题：为什么要上学。第二段阐述观点，指出学习每一门课程的目的，接着作者笔锋一转，用一个but提出质疑：上学的惟一理由就是把学校里学的一切在现实中应用吗？在第三段作者针对这个问题提出观点，即上学的真正目的就是学会如何学习。

　　本文细致地分析了接受学校教育的目的。文章虽短，但层层深入，说理透彻，发人深思。

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　　上学的目的

　　你是否问过自己为什么孩子要上学?你可能会说他们上学是去学习母语和其他语言，去学习数学、地理、几何、历史、科学及其他学科。此话不假，但他们为什么要学这些?这些东西是他们在校学习的全部内容吗?

　　我们送孩子上学是为了让他们为自己长大后的工作做准备。学习母语是为了让他们能够明确地告诉别人自己想要什么和知道什么，并能理解别人的话。学习外语是为了从外国人的著作和言语中获益并让外国人了解自己说话的含义。学数学是为了日常计量和算数，学习地理是为了了解周围的世界，学习历史是为了了解人类，因为他们每天都会与之打交道。在学校里学的一切在他们的日常生活中都有实际应用，但这就是他们上学的惟一理由吗?

　　当然不是。教育不仅仅是学习事实。首先，我们上学是为了学会如何学习，这样，当我们离开学校时，我们就能继续学习。一个会学习的人总会是一个有成就的人，因为不管他何时需要做以前从未做过的事的时候，他都能很快地自己学会以最好的办法来做。相反地，一个未受过教育的人不是无法做好新事情，就是做得很糟。因此，学校存在的目的不仅仅是教授语言、数学、地理等知识，还要教给学生学习的方法。

　　词汇斟酌

　　arithmetic n.算术
geometry n.几何

　　prepare sb. for sth. 让某人为某事做好准备

　　佳句临摹

　　①【注释】above all 最重要的；尤其

　　【临摹】He longs above all to see his family again.他尤其渴望再见到家里人。

　　②【注释】on the other hand 另一方面

　　【临摹】I want to go to the party, but on the other hand I ought to be studying. 我想去参加聚会，但从另一方面来说，我应该留下来学习。

　　思如泉涌

　　Art is long, but life is short. 人生有涯，而学无涯。

　　What is learned in the cradle is carried to the grave. 儿时所学，终生难忘。

venkatmba - 2008-8-18 0:15:00

青春是一种心境，一种气质。如果你正值青春年少，那就随着青春的脉搏一起跳动吧；即使你已经岁月沧桑，心态依然可以保持年轻。让我们青春到老。　　Youth

　　Youth is not a time of life; it is a state of mind; it is not a matter of pink cheeks, red lips and flexible knees; it is a matter of will, a quality of imagination, a vigor of the emotion, it is the freshness of the deep springs of life.

　　Youth means a dispositional control of courage over cowardice, of the appetite for adventure over the love of ease. This often exists in a man of 60 more than a boy of 20. Nobody grows old merely by a number of years. We grow old by deserting our ideals.

　　Years may wrinkle the skin, but to give up enthusiasm wrinkles the soul. Worry, fear, self-distrust bows the heart and turns the spirit back to dust.

　　Whether 60 or 16, there is in every human beings’ heart the looking forward to wonder, the endless child-like appetite of what’s next and the joy of the game of living.① In the center of your heart and my heart there is a wireless station: so long as it is receiving messages of beauty, hope, cheer, courage and power from men and from God, you are young.②

　　When the aerials are down, and your spirit is covered with snows of cynicism and the ice of pessimism, then you are grown old, even at 20, but as long as your aerials are up to catch waves of optimism, there is hope you may die young at 80.

　　［243 words］

　　行文点评

　　文章一开始使用了一组排比，用四个it is …句型给youth下了定义。第二段将60岁和20岁的人进行对比，从而得出结论：年轻不是单纯指年龄，而是指心态。读到这里，读者可能会提出质疑：那要如何保持心态的年轻呢？作者紧紧抓住读者的心理，在第四段中用a wireless station为例，形象地描述了保持年轻的方法。最后一段将对比the aerials are down和aerials are up进行对比，提出号召：只要乐观向上，我们就能够永远年轻。进一步深化了主题。

　　这篇散文语言优美，内容凝练。各段落之间有很强的内在联系，形散而神聚，全文紧紧围绕青春这一主题，运用排比、拟人、比喻等多种修辞方法是文章的一大亮点，为文章增色不少。

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　　青春寄语

　　青春不是人生的一个时期，而是一种心境。青春不是指粉红色的面颊、红润的嘴唇和灵活的膝盖，而是指坚强的意志、丰富的想象和激越的情感。青春是生命深处的一泓清泉。

　　青春是一种气质：勇猛果敢而不是怯懦退缩，渴望冒险而不是贪图安逸。一个60岁的老人身上常常散发着这种气息，而20岁的青年身上倒未必可寻。没有人会单纯因为年岁增长而衰老，而一旦丧失理想，就会真正变老。

　　年岁也许会在皮肤上生出皱纹，而热情不在则会使心灵起皱。忧虑、恐惧、自卑都会使人心灰意懒，一蹶不振。

　　无论60岁还是16岁，每一个人心里都怀有对新奇事物的向往，都会像儿童一样对未来充满永不衰减的憧憬，都能在生活的游戏中汲取快乐。在你我的心灵中央都有一座无线电台：只要它正在接受其他人和上帝发出的美丽、希望、快乐、勇气和力量的信息，你就会永远年轻。

　　当你的天线收拢，当你的心灵覆盖着愤世嫉俗的霜雪和悲观厌世的坚冰，即使你年方二十，你也已进入了垂暮之年。然而，只要你的天线张开，接收着乐观向上的电波，那么你可以指望，在80岁死去时你依然年轻。

　　词汇斟酌

　　imagination n. 想象力，幻觉

　　dispositional a. 有某种性情的

　　cowardice n. 怯懦胆小

　　appetite n. 胃口，食欲

　　enthusiasm n. 热情，积极性

　　wrinkle n. 皱纹；v. 起皱

　　aerial n. 天线

　　cynicism n. 愤世嫉俗，玩世不恭

　　pessimism n. 悲观，悲观主义

　　optimism n. 乐观，乐观主义

　　佳句临摹

　　①【注释】look forward to 期望做…，盼望…

　　【临摹】I am looking forward to seeing you again on the Christmas Eve.我期待着在平安夜再次见到你。
　　②【注释】so long as只要，如果

　　【临摹】So long as you make Mary happy I’m content.只要你能让玛丽高兴，我就满足了。

　　思如泉涌

　　Youth means limitless possibilities.年轻意味着无限的可能。If you do not learn to think when you are young, you may never learn.如果你年轻时不学着思考，你将永远不会。

venkatmba - 2008-8-18 0:16:00

越来越多的教师开始在教学中运用课堂参与的方法来提高学生的积极性和主动性。课堂参与也给学生提供了表达观点的机会，锻炼了他们的思辨能力。总之，它带来了很多好处。　　Participation in the Classroom

　　Taking part in the classroom is not only accepted but also expected of students in many courses. Some professors base part of the final grade on the student’s taking part in orally①. Although there are formal lectures during which the student has a passive role (i.e. listening and taking notes), many courses are organized around classroom discussions, student questions, and informal lectures. In graduate seminars the professor has a “managing” role and the students make presentations and lead discussions. The students do the actual teaching in these seminars.

　　A professor’s teaching style is another factor that determines the degree and type of student participation. Some professors prefer to control discussion, while others prefer to guide the class without dominating it. Many professors encourage students to question and challenge their ideas. Students who make opinions that are different from the professor’s point of view should be prepared to support their positions②.

　　In the teaching of science and mathematics, the dominant mode of instruction is generally traditional, with teachers presenting formal lectures and students taking notes. However, new educational trends have emerged in the humanities and social sciences in the past two decades. Students in education, sociology, and psychology classes, for example, are often required to solve problems in groups, design projects, make presentations, and examine case studies. Since some college or university courses are “practical” rather than theoretical, they stress “doing” and participation.

　　［253 words］

　　行文点评

　　文章第一段首先用not only...but also...句型点明作者的观点：课堂参与对学生来说不仅是可以接受的，而且是他们所期望的。第二段介绍学生参与形式和程度的其他影响因素——教授的教学风格，接着作者用Some professors prefer to...while others prefer to...举例说明了两种不同的教学风格。最后一段介绍课堂参与在不同学科中的实施情况。

　　本文的一大特色是观点和例证之间结合得很好。每一段的观点都有一个具体的例子来有力地支持它。

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　　课堂参与

　　在许多课程中，教师们不仅接受了课堂参与的理念，他们也期望着学生们能参与进来。一些教授把学生课堂上做的口头发言作为期末成绩的一部分。尽管在一些正式的讲座中，学生扮演一个被动的角色(他们听讲、做笔记)，但在许多课程中还是采用课堂讨论、学生提问和非正式演讲的形式。在研究生的讨论课上，教授扮演着“管理”角色，而由学生们发言并展开讨论。在这样的讨论课上，实际上是学生们也参与了教学。

　　一个教授的教学风格是决定学生参与形式和程度的另一个因素。一些教授喜欢主持支配讨论，一些教授则喜欢引导学生自由讨论。许多教授鼓励学生对自己的观点提出质疑。那些提出与教授相反意见的学生应该做好充分的准备来支持自己的论点。

　　在理科和数学的教学中，传统的教学模式仍占主要地位，老师讲课，学生记笔记。然而在过去20年中，在人文科学和社会科学的教学中出现了新的教学趋势。例如，学教育学、社会学和心理学的学生常被要求通过小组讨论来解决问题、设计项目、作演讲、研究案例。由于一些大学的课程是应用型的，而非理论型的，他们所强调的是“动手”和参与。

　　词汇斟酌

　　seminar n.(大学的)研究班，研讨会

　　dominate vt.支配，统治，控制

　　sociology n.社会学

　　participation n.参加

　　佳句临摹

　　①【注释】take part (in sth.)参与，参加(某事物)

　　【临摹】How many countries will be taking part in the World Cup?有多少国家要参加世界杯比赛？

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②【注释】make opinions 提出观点

　　【临摹】Most Americans think polls make their opinion worth something. 大多数美国人认为民意测验使得他们的意见显得有价值了。

　　思如泉涌

　　Knowledge is a treasure, but practice is the key to it. 知识是一座宝库，而实践是开启这座宝库的钥匙。

　　Teach others by your example. 躬亲示范。

　　A good example is the best sermon. 身教胜似言教。

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