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[四级] 英语四级写作范文冲刺(3)

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10。远离电子游戏

电子游戏的本质只是一种消谴,一种娱乐。作为学生,我们的本职工作是学习,可以体验一下电子游戏的乐趣,却不能深陷其中而无法自拔。

  Step Away From the Video Games

  Every afternoon hundreds of thousands of youths flood Internet cafes, switch on a game console, or otherwise sit down to involve themselves in intense fantasy worlds.① I’m talking about video games, games like Counter Strike, Diablo, Smash Brothers or Halo. These games can be fun and exciting, but we need to watch out for when this pastime becomes an addiction.

  Games are often incredibly exciting and dramatic, but they generally aren’t very intellectual. We don’t learn as much from them as we would simply reading a book, and spending too much time playing them can take away our study time. We need to remember that we are students first and foremost.② Nothing should ever get in the way of proper studying.③

  Video games can also be a bad influence on younger children who may be watching. Many video games are violent and the object in most of them is to kill the other players. This does not send the right message to the children who need to be told that violence is not acceptable and need to be taught how to handle situations maturely. Even if we do decide ourselves to sit down and play a violent video game, we need to make sure that it is not influencing the younger people around us.④ [221 words]

  行文点评

  文章以描述现象开始进入主题,逐步分析原因得出结论并提出呼吁。文章开头作者先提到一个普遍存在的现象:许多年轻人沉迷于电子游戏。最后一句为过渡句,作者先指出video games非常有趣、刺激,紧接着运用转折连词but将话题一转,顺势提出作者的观点:我们必须提防不要沉迷于这种消遣。在第二、三两段中,作者阐明了玩游戏的弊端,每段的首句都是这一段的主题句。第三段结尾处作者用even if提出妥协性的呼吁,为短文画上一个圆满的句号。

  本文使用了一些精彩的固定搭配,使文章增色不少,例如:第一段中的hundreds of thousands,switch on,take away,first and foremost等等。

  好文妙译

  远离电子游戏

  每天下午,成百上千的年轻人就会涌进网吧,接通游戏控制台,或者坐下来自己一人沉溺于一个紧张的梦幻世界。我说的是电子游戏,像反恐精英、 暗黑破坏神、任天堂明星大乱斗或是光环。这些游戏非常有趣、刺激,但我们必须提防不要沉迷于这种消遣之中。

  游戏通常都非常刺激、生动,但通常并不能锻炼智力。玩游戏并不能像读书那样学到很多知识,况且花太多时间玩游戏也会占据我们读书的时间。我们必须记住,首先也是最重要的一点是,我们还是学生。没有什么应该影响我们正常的学业。

  电子游戏对于那些只是观看的小孩也是一个坏影响。许多电子游戏都非常暴力,其目标大部分都是杀死另外的玩家。对于那些必须教会他们暴力是不正当的,必须教会他们成熟处理事情的孩子来说,这并没有传达一个正确的信息。即使我们自己决定坐下来打一场刺激的电子游戏,也必须确保没有影响到周围的年轻人。

  词汇斟酌

  console n. 控制台,游戏台

  switch on 用开关开启,接通电源

  intense a. 强烈的,剧烈的,紧张的;专注的,热情的

  pastime n. 消遣,娱乐

  addiction n. 沉迷,上瘾

  incredibly ad. 难以置信地

  intellectual a. 智力的,有才智的

  maturely ad. 成熟地,充分地

  violence n. 暴力

  佳句临摹

  ①【注释】hundreds and thousands of...成百上千的…

  【临摹】Within a month, there would be hundreds of thousands of cases and hundreds of thousands of deaths.仅在一个月内,就发生了成百上千的个案以及死亡案例。

  ②【注释】first and foremost 首先并且最重要的

  【临摹】He does a bit of writing, but first and foremost hes a teacher. 他也写一些文章, 但他主要是个教师。

  ③【注释】get in the way of 阻碍

  【临摹】You should never let fear get in the way of you pursuing success.永远不要让恐惧成为你追求成功的绊脚石。

  ④【注释】even if即使,纵然,尽管

  【临摹】Even if I had to walk there all the way I’ll get there.即使我得一路走着去,我也要走到那里。

  思如泉涌

  Lookers-on see more than players.当局者迷,旁观者清。

  The time of life is short; to spend that shortness basely, it would be too long.人生苦短,若虚度年华,则短暂的人生就太长了。

11。手机影响学习吗?

在大学校园里,手机的普及率越来越高。对于许多学生而言,手机已经成为他们必不可少的通讯工具。但是手机的普及也存在着许多问题,它可能会影响我们的正常学习。

  Do Mobiles Distract Study?

  Wherever you are, you can see many people equipped with mobile phones. It seems that the world becomes smaller nowadays. You could be found wherever you are so long as you take the mobile phone with you. And mobile phones are also becoming a new scene on campus.

  Students think it is extremely convenient for them to communicate with the outside world by using mobile phones, especially when they are hunting for jobs, so they call it an essential investment.

  Education experts analyze the entry of mobile phones into campus as an indication of social progress. And mobile phones have been considered advanced for its attractive functions. The youth of today send messages, surf on the net, listen to music and even take photos by using their mobile phones. To some extent, it reflects that college students are more and more involved in this modern society, rather than pedants in the “Ivory Tower”.①

  As a coin has two sides, the mobile phone, while providing convenience, causes trouble too. In classrooms, the untimely ringing interrupts lectures and destroys the atmosphere of study, so it prompts many complaints. And the mobile phone users themselves also suffer.

  Therefore, we need to think more about how to integrate mobile phones properly into our lives.②

  [214 words]

  行文点评

  文章由现象到本质,分为五个段落层次分明地对主题进行了论述。第一段由普遍现象进而引出话题,指出手机已经成为校园里的a new scene,说明讨论的内容是关于校园使用手机的问题。第二段中,作者从学生的角度切入,肯定了手机给生活带来的便利,引起学生的共鸣,为后面观点的提出作了很好的铺垫。第三段作者从专家的角度指出手机进入校园是社会进步的体现,增加说服力。第四段引出作者的观点,并举出校园实例论证自己的观点。最后一段用therefore总结全文,提出呼吁。

  文章行文流畅,第二段、第三段的首句采用了表达观点的常用句型:Students think …;Education experts analyze …使文章结构清晰。第四段用谚语a coin has two sides引出作者观点。最后一段:让手机适当地融入我们的生活,是对文章标题的有力回应,properly一词充分表明了作者对问题的认识以及建议。

  好文妙译

  手机影响学习吗?

  无论你在何地,你都会看见许多人使用手机。如今,世界似乎越来越小了,只要你带上手机出门,不管你在哪儿,你都会被找到。而在大学校园里,手机也已经成为了一道新的风景。

  学生们认为,手机可以让他们非常便利地与外界联系,特别是当他们找工作的时候,所以他们认为这是个必要的投资。

  教育专家分析,手机进入校园是社会进步的体现。手机已经成为非常先进的科技产物,具有各种吸引人的功能。现在的年青人喜欢用手机发短信、上因特网、听音乐、甚至拍照。在某种程度上,这反映了大学生越来越融入这个现代社会,而不是待在“象牙塔”里的书呆子。

  正如硬币都有两面一样,手机在提供方便的同时,也产生了一些问题。在教室里,不合时宜地响起的手机铃声不但打断了上课,而且破坏了学习的气氛,因此引起了诸多抱怨。手机使用者自己也同样是受害者。

  因此,我们应该更多地想想如何使手机适当地融入我们的生活。

  词汇斟酌

  pedant n. 学究式人物

  untimely a. 时间上不适当的,不适时的

  integrate v. 使成整体,使一体化

  佳句临摹

  ①【注释】to some extent在某种程度上,

  【临摹】To some extent, I am responsible for the delay.在某种程度上,我对拖延负有责任。

  ②【注释】integrate... into使…并入,使成为一体

  【临摹】Many young people successfully integrated themselves into their new surroundings.许多年轻人成功地同新的环境打成一片。

  思如泉涌

  Whether you like it or not, the mobile phone has already affected our lives and played an important role in the history of human beings.无论你喜不喜欢手机,它已经改变了我们的生活,并在人类历史上发挥着重要的作用。

  Whatever you do, do with all your might.不管做什么,都要一心一意。

12。考试对教育的负面影响

教育旨在培养社会需要的各类人才,而非只以考场论英雄。然而,现行教育体制下确实存在考试决定一切的现象,它已造成了太多的负面影响。

  Examinations Exert a Negative Influence on Education

  Though all the pious claim that examinations test what you know, it is common knowledge that they more often do the exact opposite.① They may be a good means of testing memory, or the knack of working rapidly under extreme pressure, but they can tell you nothing about a person’s true ability and aptitude.

  As anxiety makers, examinations are second to none. That is because so much depends on them. They are the mark of success or failure in our society. Your whole future may be decided in one fateful day. The moment a child begins school, he enters a world of sharp competition where success and failure are clearly defined and measured. Can we wonder at the increasing number of drop-outs, young people who are written off as utter failures before they have even begun a career? Can we be surprised at the suicide rate among students?

  A good education should, among other things, train you to think for yourself. The examination system does anything but that. What has to be learnt is rigidly laid down by a syllabus, so the student is encouraged to memories.② Examinations do not motivate a student to read widely, but to restrict his reading; they do not enable him to seek more and more knowledge, but induce cramming.③ The most successful candidates are not always the best educated; they are the best trained in the technique of working under pressure.

  [244 words]

  行文点评

  本文采用总分结构进行论证,第一段,开头举出一种反面观点:考试可以测试掌握知识的程度,然后予以反驳,举出与此相悖的共识,并加以阐述从而提出作者观点:考试并不能说明一个人真正的能力和资质。然后下面的两段分别论述了考试的两个弊病。第二段主要论证考试作为焦虑症制造者对于学生身心发展的影响,并结合事实引起读者共鸣。第三段论述考试的第二个弊端,不能训练人独立思维的能力反而与之相悖。

  本文的论述十分精彩,第二段详尽的论述将论点表述得淋漓尽致。两个反问句的连续使用加强了语气使得论证更有震撼力。第三段中结合实际论述了考试在训练学生思维方面的欠缺之处,but否定句式更加强了说服力。

  好文妙译

  考试对教育的负面影响

  尽管有很多人虔诚地宣称考试可以测出你掌握的知识,却有这样一个普遍的共识,即考试所做的往往与之相悖。考试或许是一种测验记忆力的好方法,或许是测验在极端压力下快速工作的诀窍。但是它却不能说明一个人真正的能力和资质。

  考试作为“焦虑症制造者”是无人能及的。这是因为有那么多事情都有赖于考试。考试在我们的社会中是成功或失败的标志。在具有决定意义的某一天,你的一生可能就被决定了。一个孩子步入学校大门那一刻起,他便步入了一个残酷竞争的世界。在那里,成功和失败都被明白无误地加以定义和衡量。辍学者的数量日渐增加——那些年轻人甚至还没有开始从事一种职业便被作为彻底的失败者而被判出局——对此,我们难道不纳闷吗?我们难道对学生中的自杀率不感到惊诧吗?

  除了其他目的之外,良好的教育应该训练人独立思维的能力。考试却根本做不到这一点。学生必须学些什么已由教学大纲生硬地规定了下来的东西,这便鼓励了学生去死记硬背。考试不但未能激发学生去广泛地阅读,反而限制了他们的阅读范围。它不但未使学生能够去追求更多的知识,反而诱导了死记硬背。最成功的应试者往往不是受教育最好的人,他们只不过是在应付工作压力的技巧方面最训练有素罢了。

  词汇斟酌

  exert vt.尽(力),施加(压力等),努力 v. 发挥,竭尽全力

  pious a. 虔诚的, 尽责的

  knack n. 诀窍

  aptitude n. (尤指学习能力方面的)才能,能力,资质,天资

  dropout n. 中途退学,辍学学生

  utter a. 全然的,彻底的,绝对的;vt. 发出,作声

  syllabus n. 课程提纲,教学大纲

  induce vt. 劝诱,促使,导致

  cram v.强行灌输,死记硬背

  佳句临摹

  ① 【注释】it is...that…常见的强调句式,加强语气

  【临摹】It is huge sums of money that ( which ) Western health care system are spending on the surgical treatment of the disease. 西方国家医疗保健机构在心脏病的手术治疗上,开支确实是巨大的。

  ②【注释】lay down规定,制定;放下,交出

  【临摹】Lay down the law and tell her you will not stand for this kind of behavior.把话讲清楚,告诉她你不会容忍这种行为。

  【临摹】We are never afraid to lay down our lives for the right cause.为了正义的事业我们绝不怕牺牲自己的生命。

  ③【注释】not…but…不是…而是…

  【临摹】What we concern is not the result of your exam but your attitude toward your study.我们在乎的并不是考试的结果而是你对学习的态度。

  思如泉涌
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